J. Haux

I agree that this story has the potential to be expanded. What I'd like to clarify is whether this post is a story meant to stand alone, or if it ...

To answer your questions... Alex is intriguing. At least for a first chapter, the aura of mystery works--her cool demeanor, 'indestructibility'. I think though, that if she remains too cool ...

Welcome to YWS, Stardust! My name's Jacquie. Glad you're here.:D :D ~Jacquie~

Hello order! This is my first critique of an essay, aside from my own essays for school, so bear with me! :wink: Writing essays is about communicating. So you have ...

Hi Jabber! (like your name, by the way! :wink:) A few years ago in my English class, when we were studying 'hooks', one of the ways was to start with ...

Happy/Merry Christmas! (And welcome to YWS!...a little late) I love a good Santa Clause poem. It distinctly reminded me of 'Twas the Night Before Christmas. I especially liked the burglar ...

Hello Rosethorn! When situations such as this arose, which they often did, he had learned the invaluable charm of patience. The best idea was to keep his mouth shut. Hold ...

It's like reading a incomplete novel. :wink: Your characters are believable, the dialogue's great, you have lovely imagery; it's engaging storytelling. And I am hooked! I've been in suspense waiting ...

Hey Searria! Heh heh...I remember this. Who knew Sasha was so evil...I always thought she liked the guinea pigs.You know I like this story--it's cute. :D Especially the way you ...

Hey Claudette! Welcome to YWS--you'll love it here, I'm sure. School has cut in on my leisure reading, too. Life is busy for everyone, I think. :D What kind of ...

You know, I read this a while back, and I have been thinking about it fondly--but I just realized I never left a critique for you! I love the title--it ...

Right. Kardas, I said I would look for this, so here I am. :D There were some words and images in the beginning that I loved. His hand settled on ...

Hi, Leeloo, I'm Jacquie. You seem fun! Welcome to YWS. :D Have fun, I'll look for your work! ~Jacquie~

Hi, Kardas, I'm Jacquie. Welcome, and have fun at YWS.! :D I don't write as often as I should, either. (In fact, there are a lot of things I should ...

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